write a narrative text (a story) about an experience that you have had on holidays.
13 thoughts on “writing: a narrative text”
Ruben Rafecas
Hello Teacher ^_^
I go WILL speak ABOUT MY holidays 1 year ago.
I was with my family, and a friends with her parents. WeWERE in Jaca, a villagE IN aragon. We were one week, in summer, we weresleep SLEPT in a hostel, and we visited THE town, and montains because IT has a lot of history WITH wiht france. In this village ocurred a war AGAINST wiht french men.
I remember, one nigHT, when we went to play bowling. IT Was my first time that I played.
This night we played five times and I won one.
I Also remember, when ANother nigHT, my brother, my friend Rafael Rivero and me we were alone in hostel, and we burden DOWNLOADED videos and photographies.
I really enjoyed this night and I WILL never forget thESE holidays, because THEY were very funny.
NICE PRACTICE RUBEN, CONTINUE WRITING
well, a finish this text because I go study Catalán because have exam.
goodbye maribel =)
Karla Martinez
Helloo Maribeeeeel!
well,I’m going to speak about my holidays in Jaca. It’s in Huesca. I went to Jaca last year, with a some friends and with my boyfriend too. I like very much the experience because we enjoyed the time. We only went three days but we enjoy the three days very much. The first day we were very tired and we decided to do something very light and we went to the bowling! I’m very exciting because was the first time thtat I go to the bowling and now i like very much go to the bowling! The second day we got up early and we went to excursion and visited the town. We had to lunch in a little restaurant but the food was very good. In the afternoon we went to a museum. At night we went to a disco, i think that that moment was the best. In the third day we got up later than the last day and in the afternoon we went to ski! I like very much!
I think that this year we will go to France for skiing !
I go to the bed Maribel jajajaja
see you tomorroow!
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Helloo Maribeeeeel!
well,I’m going to speak about my holidays in Jaca. It’s in Huesca. I went to Jaca last year, with a some friends and with my boyfriend too. I likeD very much the experience because we enjoyed the time. We only went three days but we enjoyED the three days very much. The first day we were very tired and we decided to do something very light and we went to the bowling! I WAS very excitED because was the first time that I WENT bowling and now i like very much goINGbowling! The second day we got up early and we went ON AN excursion and visited the town. We had to lunch in a little restaurant but the food was very good. In the afternoon we went to a museum. At night we went to a disco, i think that that moment was the best. InON the third day we got up later than the last day and in the afternoon we went SKIING! I likeD IT very much!
I think that this year we will go to France for skiing !
I go to the bed Maribel jajajaja
see you tomorroow!
THANKS CARLA, NICE HOLIDAYS! AND NICE TEXT!
Josep Mª García
Hi Maribel! I’m speaking with my holidays in Tenerife.
I ‘ve been to Tenerife with my family one time, in July of 2002.
We were host in a hotel. We had many things. We visited the Teide, a lot of beaches. We tested one salsa typical of the Canarias. I remember that one day we went to a mountain that had a lot of time there was a part of a volcano. We saw it inside and it was very interested, because one man explained as the lava was converted in a rock.
We usually were outside of the hotel, because we were visited places interests and when we were inside the hotel my sister and me were usually inside the swimming pool.
I remember too that we visited one place that it was a one kind of park for butterfly, and it was full of all kinds of butterfly, one butterfly can put on of the people, there was spectacular. We went a park of the animals, it was as one zoo but better. It had shows with animals, and I remember that one of the shows was with parrots, parrots very funny.
In short, my family and I spent great holidays.
Bye Maribel! I hope that you like it. (The origial text is this, I always forget something).
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Hi Maribel! I’m speaking with ABOUT my holidays in Tenerife.
I ‘ve been to Tenerife with my family one timeONCE, in July of 2002.
We were hostSTAYED in a hotel. We hadDID many things. We visited the Teide, a lot of beaches. We tAsted one salsa typical of the Canarias SAUCE. I remember that one day we went to a mountain that a lot of time AGO was a part of a volcano. We saw it inside and it was very interestING, because one man explained HOW the lava was convertedBECAME rock.
We WERE usually were outside of the hotel, because we were INTERESTING visited places interests and when we were inside the hotel my sister and I me were usually inside the swimming pool.
I remember too that we visited one place that it was a one kind of park for butterflIES, and it was full of all kinds of butterflIES, one butterfly can STAND on the people, there IT was spectacular. We went TO a park of the animals, it was as one zoo but better. It had shows with animals, and I remember that one of the shows was with parrots, parrots very funny PARROTS.
In short, my family and I spent great holidays.
Bye Maribel! I hope that you like it. (The original text is this, I always forget something).
THANKS JOSEP Mª, REVISE THE MISTAKES AND IF ANY DOUBT, ASK ME, PLEASE… GOOD EFFORT
Mireia Ribas
Hi Maribel, I speak about with my last summer.
I started the summer very well because I used to always stay with my boyfriend. I know people who have scored a lot in my life. In July I was by Piera, but in early August I went out one week. I went with my parents in an apartment in Calafell. In Calafell is where my aunt lives and I stay the all of days with her. After I returned to Piera and I spent days with the family of my mother who came to spend some time with us. It is also friends with each day, we went to the movies, shopping, the beach at the pool …
It was a very good summer and I hope this is still better.
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Hi Maribel, I speak about with my last summer.I started the summer very well because I used to always stay with my boyfriend?????. I know people who have scored ????a lot in my life. In July I was IN Piera, but in early August I went out one week. I went with my parents TO an apartment in Calafell. In Calafell is where my aunt lives and I stayED all days with her. After THAT, I returned to Piera and I spent days with the family of my mother who came to spend some time with us. It is also friends with each day, we went to the movies, shopping, the beach at the pool …
It was a very good summer and I hope this is still better.
Laura Domènech
Hello Maribel
Today I go to write about my last hollydays. This year I go to Menorca with my parents and my sister about ten days. I like very much Menorca because it’s a very nice and peaceful island. It’s so little so we can visited all the istand in that time. The beaches are very beautiful because all of them are unspoiled. Menorca’s towns are very nice too and very relaxing. In the most importants cittys like “Maó i Ciutadella” I could buy a lot of things because there are many shops, but there were few people so we were relaxing there too and we could eat in the restaurant that we wanted. We stayed in a hotel apartment. Also we saw some prehistoric monuments. The most funny day was when I went walking with my father to “la Macarella” and “la Macarelleta”, two coves. This two coves are the most nice Menorca’s coves. I was very excited because they were the two coves that we could see in “Estrella Damm” TV ad. The weather was fantastic and we could sunbathe every day.
In my opinion Menorca is great and I hope I can returned there soon.
Bye Maribel !
xxoo
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Hello Maribel
Today I WILL write about my last hollydays. This year I HAVE BEEN IN Menorca with my parents and my sister FOR about ten days. I like very much Menorca because it’s a very nice and peaceful island. It’s so little so we can visited all the istand in that time. The beaches are very beautiful because all of them are unspoiled. Menorca’s towns are very nice too and very relaxing. In the most importants citIES like “Maó i Ciutadella” I could buy a lot of things because there are many shops, but there were few people so we were relaxing there too and we could eat in the restaurant that we wanted. We stayed in a hotel apartment. Also, we saw some prehistoric monuments. The most funny FUNNIEST day was when I went walking with my father to “la Macarella” and “la Macarelleta”, two coves. ThESE two cAves are the NICEST most nice Menorca’s cAves. I was very excited because they were the two coves that we could see in “Estrella Damm” TV ad. The weather was fantastic and we could sunbathe every day.
In my opinion Menorca is great and I hope I can returned there soon.
Bye Maribel !
xxoo
Alicia Robles Indiano
Hello Maribel, I’m going to speak my holidays in Calafell.
I’ve gone to Calafell with my parents many times. Last year were my better holidays. We went to Calafell but this time I went with my parents and two friends.
We stay one week. The first day as soon as we arrived we leave the suitcases. We went to the beach and we sunbathed.I always think that the holidays are relaxed when I am in the beach, because of it we decide that this holidays were active.
Normally in the mornings we were in the beach, in the evening we were in the swimmingpool and to the night we go out to see a shops. When we go out in the night we did some friends.We decide that we can do things different. Some days we went to the golf course, we go out with rollerskaters for the street.The best day was when we rent a few motorcycles of water, it was very exciting and funny. The same day in the evening we went to the beach. We were inside the sea, when we saw a few jellyfish and we were scared.
This holidays was best. When we went I was sad because the holidays was finished. This holidays were fantastic.
Bye bye!
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Hello Maribel, I’m going to speak my holidays in Calafell.
I’ve BEEN gone to Calafell with my parents many times. Last year were my better BEST holidays. We went to Calafell but this time I went with my parents and two friends.
We stayED one week. The first day as soon as we arrived we leave LEFT the suitcases. We went to the beach and we sunbathed.I always think that the holidays are relaxING when I am in the beach, because of THAT we decide that thEsE holidays were active.
Normally in the mornings we were On the beach, in the evening we were in the swimmingpool and AT the night we WENT SHOPPING out to see a shops. When we WENT out AT night we did some friends.We decideD that we cOULD do things different. Some days we went to the golf course, we WENT out with rollerskaters ON the street.The best day was when we rentED WATER motorcycles, it was very exciting and funny. The same day in the evening we went to the beach. We were inside the sea, when we saw a few jellyfish and we were scared.
THANKS ALICIA, NICE TEXT.
This holidays was best. When we went I was sad because the holidays was finished. This holidays were fantastic.
Bye bye!
Assumpta Torres
Hello Maribel!!
I’m going to explain the best holidays that I had, for the moment.
This year, when I did 4th ESO, my friends, two teachers and I went to the Mediterranean Cruise, for the travel of final term.
The cruise was my best holidays, because I never had gone to the cruise before.
But this experience was the best experience that I have, because I went with my class, and I have a lot of very good friends.
I went in holidays for a one week, and I really enjoyed about that, and if I can, I will repeat this travel.
In the Cruise, we did very interesting things:
We visited a lot of cities like Roma, Florence, Pisa, Ville France, Monaco, Capri, Mallorca, and others places.
We swam in the swimming pool, in the sea, and we went to the disco a lot of times.
I think that this travel was very important for all of my friends of Capellades.
This travel was the end of our class, and the next year everybody will go to the other high school, because, in my old high school only have until 4th ESO, there isn’t “batxillerat”.
Well, this travel was very important, and I have a lot of great and funny memories with my old class.
This is my best experience!
See you!
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Hello Maribel!!
I’m going to explain the best holidays that I HAVE had, for the moment.
This year, when I did 4th ESO, my friends, two teachers and I went to the Mediterranean Cruise, for the END OF TERM TRIP travel of final term.
The cruise was my best holiday, because I HAD never BEEN had gone ON A cruise before.
But this experience was the best experience that I have HAD, because I went with my class, and I have a lot of very good friends.
I went On holidays for a one week, and I really enjoyed about that, and if I can, I will repeat this travelJOURNEY.
In the Cruise, we did very interesting things:
We visited a lot of cities like RomE, Florence, Pisa, Ville France, Monaco, Capri, Mallorca, and others places.
We swam in the swimming pool, in the sea, and we went to the disco a lot of times.
I think that this TRIP travel was very important for all of my friends of Capellades.
This travel was the end of our class, and the next year everybody will go to the other high school, because, in my old high school THERE IS only have until 4th ESO, there isn’t “batxillerat”.
Well, this travelTRIP was very important, and I have a lot of great and funny memories with my old class.
This is my best experience!
See you!
SOUNDS REAL FUN! NICE EXPERIENCE, KEEP ON WRITING
neus olalla
The last year I’ve been to Asturias and my family. We was in august.
As soon as we arrived in the house. Where we slept for two weeks, there man of the house we teach it.
The house was old and had a skin of a tiger and a head of a boar and I was cold.
The day I had a skip miller was day that we go to see a rice biking it was fun because when pass the participants jumping water.
We get to eight in the morning to take please since thought it was at then and then turns at that at age twelve. I also enjoyed the day we went to see a performance like living in a cave on our ancestors
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The last year I’ve been WENT to Asturias and WITH my family. WeIT was in august.
As soon as we arrived in the house Where we WOULD SLEEP slept for two weeks, there man of the house SHOED IT TO US we teach it.
The house was old and had a skin of a tiger and a head of a boar and IT was cold.
The day I had a skip miller???? was day that we WENT go to see a rice biking RACE, it was fun because when pass the participants PASSED BY WE GOT SPLASHED jumping water.
We gOT UP At to eight in the morning to take please since thought it was at then and then turns at that at age twelve. I also enjoyed the day we went to see a performance like living in a cave on our ancestors
NEUS, I HAVE SOME PROBLEMS UNDERSTANDING YOUR WRITING, TRY TO THINK OF SIMPLE SENTENCES AND AVOID TRANSLATE DIRECTLY FROM YOUR NATIVE LANGUAGE. KEEP WRITING, IT WILL GET BETTER. NICE EFFORT.
Elisa
Hello Maribel!
I’m going to explain my last holidays wich have been the best of my life.
On the first week of August I went on a cruise through the Mediterranean Sea during one week. The first afternoon I went for a walk inside the cruise to know where was every place. Then I went to have lunch with my parents and three more families who were every night the same people. Every night after having lunch there was a show in the theatre, and while we were waiting to go there we used to play bingo in one of the living rooms. When the show was finished I always went to the disco. The first night I was a bit nervious because I didn’t know anybody, but then, from the second day I always went with a very nice group of friends that I met there. There was a lot of young people, and it was imposible to meet everybody. Every day we visited a different city, but we didn’t see a lot of things because we didn’t have many hours. Always that I had free time I went with my cruise friends and we used to go to the swimming pool, to dancing lesons or to the living room. There were three special nights: the Captain’s night( everybody had to wear formal dresses), the Tropical night (people could wear costumes) and the White night (everybody had to wear white clothes). For me the best of that nights was the White night, because there was a big party on the last deck, and everybody was there dancing. The last thing that I want to say is that the tripulation was very nice and friendly: the waiters, the entertainers, etc. And I’m still in touch with one of the waiters and of course with the people I met there.
For me this has been a great experience and I really would like to repeat it!
Bye Maribel!
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Hello Maribel!
I’m going to explain my last holidays wHich have been the best of my life.
On the first week of August I went on a cruise through the Mediterranean Sea during one week. The first afternoon I went for a walk inside the cruise to know where was every place WAS. Then I went to have lunch with my parents and three more families who were every night the same people. Every night after having lunch there was a show in the theatre, and while we were waiting to go there we used to play bingo in one of the living rooms. When the show was finished I always went to the disco. The first night I was a bit nervious because I didn’t know anybody, but then, from the second day I always went with a very nice group of friends that I met there. There was a lot of young people, and it was impoSsible to meet everybody. Every day we visited a different city, but we didn’t see a lot of things because we didn’t have many hours. Always that I had free time I went with my cruise friends and we used to go to the swimming pool, to dancing lesons or to the living room. There were three special nights: the Captain’s night( everybody had to wear formal dresses), the Tropical night (people could wear costumes) and the White night (everybody had to wear white clothes). For me the best of that nights was the White night, because there was a big party on the last deck, and everybody was there dancing. The last thing that I want to say is that the CREW tripulation was very nice and friendly: the waiters, the entertainers, etc. And I’m still in touch with one of the waiters and of course with the people I met there.
For me this has been a great experience and I really would like to repeat it!
Bye Maribel!
SOUNDS REALLYTEMPTING!!! THE TEXT IS VERY WELL WRITTEN.
Edgar Gutiérrez Biel
Hello, I am Edgar Gutiérrez, and now I will explain to you a small summary of my summer.
Start this summer satisfy for my notes, which were very good, with an average of 7,8. Since I give they gave me a new mobile phone.
When start the summer, only go out 3 or 4 days a week, but at the last go out every day. This summer I have made myself a friends of some people as Alex Juez, Ariadna Gil or Ferran Claramunt. Now, I will explain a bit like it has been my summer with these three persons, though I have known a lot of people.
First, Alex Juez, has been the best “innovation” between my friends. We were known of it does very much, but we never remove well, do not are friends. But from Cantabria we speak very much and now he is a very important person for my.
Now I speak from Ariadna Gil. Always speak with she, even she I like me, but up to this summer we were not friends. Now we speak very much i help ourselves in what we khan. Often we have an argument, but we love ourselves very much.
Finally I will speak of ferran, though I have known many mas you present. Ferran I knew it in a party of basketball in which he plays. We were speaking for msn, and one day let’s stay to speak, and we ate in a restaurant of piera. Then we continue speaking many , and now i explain much to him. He goes to my class, i also he is one of my best friends
I knew many lot of people, but this 3 are the most important people what i knew in summer
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Hello, I am Edgar Gutiérrez, and now I will explain to you a small summary of my summer.
Start this summer satisfy for my notes, AT THE BEGINNING OF THE SUMMER,I WAS VERY SATISFIED ABOUT MY MARKS,which were very good, with an average of 7,8. Since THEN, give MY PARENTS they gave me a new mobile phone.
When start the summer STARTED, I COULD only go out 3 or 4 days a week, but at the END I WAS ALLOWED TO go out every day. This summer I have made SOME NEW FRIENDS myself a friends of some people as Alex Juez, Ariadna Gil or Ferran Claramunt. Now, I will explain a bit HOW like it has been my summer HAS BEEN with these three persons, though I have known a lot of people.
First, Alex Juez, has been the best “innovation” between my friends. We HAD KNOWN EACH OTHER FOR A LONG TIME were known of it does very much, but we never GOT ON remove well, WE WERE NOT do not are friends. But from THE SCHOOL TRIP TO Cantabria we speak very much and now he is a very important person for mE.
Now I speak ABOUT Ariadna Gil. I always speak TO she, I even LIKED HER she I like me, but up to this summer we were not friends. Now we speak very much WE help EACH OTHER ourselves what we CAN khan. Often we have an argument, but we love EACH OTHER ourselves very much.
Finally I will speak ABOUT ferran, though I have known many mas you present????. Ferran I knewMET FERRAN in a partyGAME of basketbal, which he plays. We were speaking THROUGH msn, and one day WE STARTED TO let’s stay to speak, and we ate in a restaurant of piera. Then we continueD speaking OFTEN many , and now I explain much to him. He goes to my class, he is ALSO one of my best friends
I knew many MORE people, but thESE 3 are the most important people what I MET in summer
THANKS EDGAR, TRY NOT TO TRANSLATE FROM SPANISH WHEN YOU WRITE, TRY TO RESPECT SENTENCE STRUCTURE AND WORD ORDER.
Pau del Pozo de Torres
Hello Maribel, in this text I explain one of the days that I was too happy on holidays.
I’ve been to France with my family a lot of times. One year we went to visit the region of Normandy. In this holidays we did a lot of activities, visited museums, visited cities … But I remember specially one, when we visited a museum of the “Second World War”. Now I don’t remember where is this museum, but the experience of saw airplanes, tanks, etc, was too strange. After visited this museum, my brother, my sister and I were too happy, because we did “la croqueta” in the craters that were produced for the explosions of the bombs.
All in all I Think that this holidays are one of the best holidays in my life.
Bye bye!!!
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Hello Maribel, in this text I explain one of the days that I was happIEST on holidays.
I’ve been to France with my family a lot of times. One year we went to visit the region of Normandy. In this holiday we did a lot of activities, visited museums, visited cities … But I remember specially one, when we visited a museum of the “Second World War”. Now I don’t remember where is this museum IS, but the experience of SEEING airplanes, tanks, etc, was too strange. After visitING this museum, my brother, my sister and I were VERY happy, because we ROLLED DOWN ( did “la croqueta” ) in the craters that were produced for the explosions of the bombs.
All in all I Think that this holidays are one of the best holidays in my life.
Bye bye!!!
THANKS PAU, IT’S DIFFICULT TO TRANSLATE “FER LA CROQUETA!, JO OPTARIA PER TRADUIR QUELCOM SEMBLANT A RODOLAR AVALL…
NICE TEXT
galan
hello maribel in this text speak about my summer 2010
The last year i went to a camping of the Catalan Pyrenees. Is a camping for the high mountain in ” Rivera De Cardós”. the name of the camping is “camping del cardós” is a espectacular place.I went with my family, friends and my girlfriend Judit. this camping is very important for me because i resort every year since I was born.
This year is very important because we passed us very well because we did many things.This year we camped in tents. 1 tend with my family and other tend with the friends with my parents. in this summer i did a lot of things:ride a horse , ride a competition bike, climbing a mountain, swin in the lake and river, and other activities.
Definitely has been a very active summer that I enjoyed to the fullest.
bye bye Maribel
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hello maribel in this text I speak about my summer 2010
The last year I went ___camping IN the Catalan Pyrenees. IT is a camping-SITE IN the high mountain in ” Rivera De Cardós”. The name of the camping-SITE is “camping del cardós”, IT is a espectacular place.I went with my family, friends and my girlfriend Judit. This camping-PLACE is very important for me because I GO THERE ON HOLIDAYS every year since I was born.
This year WAS very important because we HAD A VERY GOOD TIME because we did many things.This year we camped in tents. 1 tenT with my family and other tenT with the friends with my parents’ FRIENDS. in this summer I did a lot of things:ridING a horse , rideING a competition bike, climbing a mountain, swiMMING in the lake and river, and other activities.
Definitely IT has been a very active summer that I enjoyed to the fullest.
bye bye Maribel
THANKS DAVID, ENJOYABLE SUMMER! KEEP ON WRITING!
Alba Flo Ventayol
Hello Maribel! How are you? I hope well.
I’m going to speak about my holidays in “Calella de Palafrugell”. I’ve been in Calella two times, the summer of 2009 and last summer. I went to this place because the parents of my boyfriend go there every summer, and they invited me because we get on very well, and my boyfriend and I go out since december of 2008. As soon as we arrived, we went to the apartment and emptied our bags because they usually stayed there two or three weeks.Then we put on a swimsuit and went to the beach. In Calella there’re a lot of bays, and we can choose which to sunbathe and relax. I don’t like active holidays, because I think that holidays are for have relaxing.
In Calella it was windy. This type of wind is called Tramuntana, a strong wind and annoying. But always sunny and very hot. There’re so many tourists, French especially because Calella is located near the “border”. The parents of my boyfriend were sunbath all the time, and my boyfriend and I went to the sea because we wanted to saw the jellyfish with a water glasses. For lucky, the jellyfish wasn’t hurt us because we take after ourselves.
Last hollidays were so funny because we did a lot of activities during the day: for example one day we trought a bay with a “kayac”.
Bye bye Maribel, I hope you like it!
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Hello Maribel! How are you? I hope YOU’RE well.
I’m going to speak about my holidays in “Calella de Palafrugell”. I’ve been in Calella TWICE, IN the summer of 2009 and last summer. I went to this place because my boyfriend’S PARENTS go there every summer, and they invited me because we get on very well, and my boyfriend and I go out since december of 2008. As soon as we arrived, we went to the apartment and emptied our bags because they usually stay__ there two or three weeks.Then we put on a swimsuit and went to the beach. In Calella there’re a lot of bays, and we can choose which to sunbathe and relax. I don’t like active holidays, because I think that holidays are for RELAXING.
In Calella it was windy. This type of wind is called Tramuntana, a strong wind and annoying. But IT’S always sunny and very hot. There’re so many tourists, ESPECIALLY French because Calella is located near the “border”. My boyfriend’S PARENTS were sunbathING all the time, and my boyfriend and I went to the sea because we wanted to sEE the jellyfish with GOGGLES. LUCKILY, the jellyfish DIDN’T hurt us because we TOOK CARE OF ourselves.
Last hoLidays were so funny because we did a lot of activities during the day: for example one day we CROSSED a bay with a “kayac”.
Bye bye Maribel, I hope you like it!
MMM, SOUNDS LIKE VERY EXCITING HOLIDAYS! NICE TEXT, ALBA.
write a narrative text (a story) about an experience that you have had on holidays.
Hello Teacher ^_^
I
goWILL speak ABOUT MY holidays 1 year ago.I was with my family, and a friend
swith her parents. WeWERE in Jaca, a villagE IN aragon. We were one week, in summer, weweresleepSLEPT in a hostel, and we visited THE town, and montains because IT has a lot of history WITHwihtfrance. In this village ocurred a war AGAINSTwihtfrench men.I remember, one nigHT, when we went to play bowling. IT Was my first time that I played.
This night we played five times and I won one.
I Also remember, when ANother nigHT, my brother, my friend Rafael Rivero and me
wewere alone in hostel, and we burdenDOWNLOADED videos and photographies.I really enjoyed this night and I WILL never forget thESE holidays, because THEY were very funny.
NICE PRACTICE RUBEN, CONTINUE WRITING
well, a finish this text because I go study Catalán because have exam.
goodbye maribel =)
Helloo Maribeeeeel!
well,I’m going to speak about my holidays in Jaca. It’s in Huesca. I went to Jaca last year, with a some friends and with my boyfriend too. I like very much the experience because we enjoyed the time. We only went three days but we enjoy the three days very much. The first day we were very tired and we decided to do something very light and we went to the bowling! I’m very exciting because was the first time thtat I go to the bowling and now i like very much go to the bowling! The second day we got up early and we went to excursion and visited the town. We had to lunch in a little restaurant but the food was very good. In the afternoon we went to a museum. At night we went to a disco, i think that that moment was the best. In the third day we got up later than the last day and in the afternoon we went to ski! I like very much!
I think that this year we will go to France for skiing !
I go to the bed Maribel jajajaja
see you tomorroow!
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Helloo Maribeeeeel!
well,I’m going to speak about my holidays in Jaca. It’s in Huesca. I went to Jaca last year, with
asome friends and with my boyfriend too. I likeD very much the experience because we enjoyed the time. We only went three days but we enjoyED the three days very much. The first day we were very tired and we decided to do something very light and we wentto thebowling! I WAS very excitED because was the first time that I WENT bowling and now i like very much goINGbowling! The second day we got up early and we went ON AN excursion and visited the town. We hadtolunch in a little restaurant but the food was very good. In the afternoon we went to a museum. At night we went to a disco, i think that that moment was the best.InON the third day we got up later than the last day and in the afternoon we went SKIING! I likeD IT very much!I think that this year we will go to France for skiing !
I go to the bed Maribel jajajaja
see you tomorroow!
THANKS CARLA, NICE HOLIDAYS! AND NICE TEXT!
Hi Maribel! I’m speaking with my holidays in Tenerife.
I ‘ve been to Tenerife with my family one time, in July of 2002.
We were host in a hotel. We had many things. We visited the Teide, a lot of beaches. We tested one salsa typical of the Canarias. I remember that one day we went to a mountain that had a lot of time there was a part of a volcano. We saw it inside and it was very interested, because one man explained as the lava was converted in a rock.
We usually were outside of the hotel, because we were visited places interests and when we were inside the hotel my sister and me were usually inside the swimming pool.
I remember too that we visited one place that it was a one kind of park for butterfly, and it was full of all kinds of butterfly, one butterfly can put on of the people, there was spectacular. We went a park of the animals, it was as one zoo but better. It had shows with animals, and I remember that one of the shows was with parrots, parrots very funny.
In short, my family and I spent great holidays.
Bye Maribel! I hope that you like it. (The origial text is this, I always forget something).
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Hi Maribel! I’m speaking
withABOUT my holidays in Tenerife.I ‘ve been to Tenerife with my family
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Bye Maribel! I hope that you like it. (The original text is this, I always forget something).
THANKS JOSEP Mª, REVISE THE MISTAKES AND IF ANY DOUBT, ASK ME, PLEASE… GOOD EFFORT
Hi Maribel, I speak about with my last summer.
I started the summer very well because I used to always stay with my boyfriend. I know people who have scored a lot in my life. In July I was by Piera, but in early August I went out one week. I went with my parents in an apartment in Calafell. In Calafell is where my aunt lives and I stay the all of days with her. After I returned to Piera and I spent days with the family of my mother who came to spend some time with us. It is also friends with each day, we went to the movies, shopping, the beach at the pool …
It was a very good summer and I hope this is still better.
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Hi Maribel, I speak about with my last summer.I started the summer very well because I used to always stay with my boyfriend?????. I know people who have
scored????a lot in my life. In July I was IN Piera, but in early August I went out one week. I went with my parents TO an apartment in Calafell. In Calafell is where my aunt lives and I stayED all days with her. After THAT, I returned to Piera and I spent days with the family of my mother who came to spend some time with us. It is also friends with each day, we went to the movies, shopping, the beach at the pool …It was a very good summer and I hope this is still better.
Hello Maribel
Today I go to write about my last hollydays. This year I go to Menorca with my parents and my sister about ten days. I like very much Menorca because it’s a very nice and peaceful island. It’s so little so we can visited all the istand in that time. The beaches are very beautiful because all of them are unspoiled. Menorca’s towns are very nice too and very relaxing. In the most importants cittys like “Maó i Ciutadella” I could buy a lot of things because there are many shops, but there were few people so we were relaxing there too and we could eat in the restaurant that we wanted. We stayed in a hotel apartment. Also we saw some prehistoric monuments. The most funny day was when I went walking with my father to “la Macarella” and “la Macarelleta”, two coves. This two coves are the most nice Menorca’s coves. I was very excited because they were the two coves that we could see in “Estrella Damm” TV ad. The weather was fantastic and we could sunbathe every day.
In my opinion Menorca is great and I hope I can returned there soon.
Bye Maribel !
xxoo
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Hello Maribel
Today I WILL write about my last hollydays. This year I HAVE BEEN IN Menorca with my parents and my sister FOR about ten days. I like very much Menorca because it’s a very nice and peaceful island. It’s so little so we can visit
edall the istand in that time. The beaches are very beautiful because all of them are unspoiled. Menorca’s towns are very nice too and very relaxing. In the most importantscitIES like “Maó i Ciutadella” I could buy a lot of things because there are many shops, but there were few people so we were relaxing there too and we could eat in the restaurant that we wanted. We stayed in a hotel apartment. Also, we saw some prehistoric monuments. Themost funnyFUNNIEST day was when I went walking with my father to “la Macarella” and “la Macarelleta”, two coves. ThESE two cAves are the NICESTmost niceMenorca’s cAves. I was very excited because they were the two coves that we could see in “Estrella Damm” TV ad. The weather was fantastic and we could sunbathe every day.In my opinion Menorca is great and I hope I can return
edthere soon.Bye Maribel !
xxoo
Hello Maribel, I’m going to speak my holidays in Calafell.
I’ve gone to Calafell with my parents many times. Last year were my better holidays. We went to Calafell but this time I went with my parents and two friends.
We stay one week. The first day as soon as we arrived we leave the suitcases. We went to the beach and we sunbathed.I always think that the holidays are relaxed when I am in the beach, because of it we decide that this holidays were active.
Normally in the mornings we were in the beach, in the evening we were in the swimmingpool and to the night we go out to see a shops. When we go out in the night we did some friends.We decide that we can do things different. Some days we went to the golf course, we go out with rollerskaters for the street.The best day was when we rent a few motorcycles of water, it was very exciting and funny. The same day in the evening we went to the beach. We were inside the sea, when we saw a few jellyfish and we were scared.
This holidays was best. When we went I was sad because the holidays was finished. This holidays were fantastic.
Bye bye!
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Hello Maribel, I’m going to speak my holidays in Calafell.
I’ve BEEN
goneto Calafell with my parents many times. Last year were mybetterBEST holidays. We went to Calafell but this time I went with my parents and two friends.We stayED one week. The first day as soon as we arrived we
leaveLEFT the suitcases. We went to the beach and we sunbathed.I always think that the holidays are relaxING when I am in the beach, because of THAT we decide that thEsE holidays were active.Normally in the mornings we were On the beach, in the evening we were in the swimmingpool and AT the night we WENT SHOPPING
out to see a shops. When we WENT out AT night we did some friends.We decideD that we cOULD do things different. Some days we went to the golf course, we WENT out with rollerskaters ON the street.The best day was when we rentED WATER motorcycles, it was very exciting and funny. The same day in the evening we went to the beach. We were inside the sea, when we saw a few jellyfish and we were scared.THANKS ALICIA, NICE TEXT.
This holidays was best. When we went I was sad because the holidays was finished. This holidays were fantastic.
Bye bye!
Hello Maribel!!
I’m going to explain the best holidays that I had, for the moment.
This year, when I did 4th ESO, my friends, two teachers and I went to the Mediterranean Cruise, for the travel of final term.
The cruise was my best holidays, because I never had gone to the cruise before.
But this experience was the best experience that I have, because I went with my class, and I have a lot of very good friends.
I went in holidays for a one week, and I really enjoyed about that, and if I can, I will repeat this travel.
In the Cruise, we did very interesting things:
We visited a lot of cities like Roma, Florence, Pisa, Ville France, Monaco, Capri, Mallorca, and others places.
We swam in the swimming pool, in the sea, and we went to the disco a lot of times.
I think that this travel was very important for all of my friends of Capellades.
This travel was the end of our class, and the next year everybody will go to the other high school, because, in my old high school only have until 4th ESO, there isn’t “batxillerat”.
Well, this travel was very important, and I have a lot of great and funny memories with my old class.
This is my best experience!
See you!
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Hello Maribel!!
I’m going to explain the best holidays that I HAVE had, for the moment.
This year, when I did 4th ESO, my friends, two teachers and I went to the Mediterranean Cruise, for the END OF TERM TRIP
travel of final term.The cruise was my best holiday, because I HAD never BEEN
had goneON A cruise before.But this experience was the best experience that I have HAD, because I went with my class, and I have a lot of very good friends.
I went On holidays for a
oneweek, and I really enjoyedaboutthat, and if I can, I will repeat thistravelJOURNEY.In the Cruise, we did very interesting things:
We visited a lot of cities like RomE, Florence, Pisa, Ville France, Monaco, Capri, Mallorca, and other
splaces.We swam in the swimming pool, in the sea, and we went to the disco a lot of times.
I think that this TRIP
travelwas very important for allofmy friends of Capellades.This travel was the end of our class, and the next year everybody will go to the other high school, because, in my old high school THERE IS only
haveuntil 4th ESO, there isn’t “batxillerat”.Well, this
travelTRIP was very important, and I have a lot of great and funny memories with my old class.This is my best experience!
See you!
SOUNDS REAL FUN! NICE EXPERIENCE, KEEP ON WRITING
The last year I’ve been to Asturias and my family. We was in august.
As soon as we arrived in the house. Where we slept for two weeks, there man of the house we teach it.
The house was old and had a skin of a tiger and a head of a boar and I was cold.
The day I had a skip miller was day that we go to see a rice biking it was fun because when pass the participants jumping water.
We get to eight in the morning to take please since thought it was at then and then turns at that at age twelve. I also enjoyed the day we went to see a performance like living in a cave on our ancestors
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toeight in the morningto take please since thought it was at then and then turns at that at age twelve. I also enjoyed the day we went to see a performance like living in a cave on our ancestorsNEUS, I HAVE SOME PROBLEMS UNDERSTANDING YOUR WRITING, TRY TO THINK OF SIMPLE SENTENCES AND AVOID TRANSLATE DIRECTLY FROM YOUR NATIVE LANGUAGE. KEEP WRITING, IT WILL GET BETTER. NICE EFFORT.
Hello Maribel!
I’m going to explain my last holidays wich have been the best of my life.
On the first week of August I went on a cruise through the Mediterranean Sea during one week. The first afternoon I went for a walk inside the cruise to know where was every place. Then I went to have lunch with my parents and three more families who were every night the same people. Every night after having lunch there was a show in the theatre, and while we were waiting to go there we used to play bingo in one of the living rooms. When the show was finished I always went to the disco. The first night I was a bit nervious because I didn’t know anybody, but then, from the second day I always went with a very nice group of friends that I met there. There was a lot of young people, and it was imposible to meet everybody. Every day we visited a different city, but we didn’t see a lot of things because we didn’t have many hours. Always that I had free time I went with my cruise friends and we used to go to the swimming pool, to dancing lesons or to the living room. There were three special nights: the Captain’s night( everybody had to wear formal dresses), the Tropical night (people could wear costumes) and the White night (everybody had to wear white clothes). For me the best of that nights was the White night, because there was a big party on the last deck, and everybody was there dancing. The last thing that I want to say is that the tripulation was very nice and friendly: the waiters, the entertainers, etc. And I’m still in touch with one of the waiters and of course with the people I met there.
For me this has been a great experience and I really would like to repeat it!
Bye Maribel!
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Hello Maribel!
I’m going to explain my last holidays wHich have been the best of my life.
On the first week of August I went on a cruise through the Mediterranean Sea during one week. The first afternoon I went for a walk inside the cruise to know where
wasevery place WAS. Then I went to have lunch with my parents and three more families who were every night the same people. Every night after having lunch there was a show in the theatre, and while we were waiting to go there we used to play bingo in one of the living rooms. When the show was finished I always went to the disco. The first night I was a bit nervious because I didn’t know anybody, but then, from the second day I always went with a very nice group of friends that I met there. There was a lot of young people, and it was impoSsible to meet everybody. Every day we visited a different city, but we didn’t see a lot of things because we didn’t have many hours. Always that I had free time I went with my cruise friends and we used to go to the swimming pool, to dancing lesons or to the living room. There were three special nights: the Captain’s night( everybody had to wear formal dresses), the Tropical night (people could wear costumes) and the White night (everybody had to wear white clothes). For me the best of that nights was the White night, because there was a big party on the last deck, and everybody was there dancing. The last thing that I want to say is that the CREWtripulationwas very nice and friendly: the waiters, the entertainers, etc. And I’m still in touch with one of the waiters and of course with the people I met there.For me this has been a great experience and I really would like to repeat it!
Bye Maribel!
SOUNDS REALLYTEMPTING!!! THE TEXT IS VERY WELL WRITTEN.
Hello, I am Edgar Gutiérrez, and now I will explain to you a small summary of my summer.
Start this summer satisfy for my notes, which were very good, with an average of 7,8. Since I give they gave me a new mobile phone.
When start the summer, only go out 3 or 4 days a week, but at the last go out every day. This summer I have made myself a friends of some people as Alex Juez, Ariadna Gil or Ferran Claramunt. Now, I will explain a bit like it has been my summer with these three persons, though I have known a lot of people.
First, Alex Juez, has been the best “innovation” between my friends. We were known of it does very much, but we never remove well, do not are friends. But from Cantabria we speak very much and now he is a very important person for my.
Now I speak from Ariadna Gil. Always speak with she, even she I like me, but up to this summer we were not friends. Now we speak very much i help ourselves in what we khan. Often we have an argument, but we love ourselves very much.
Finally I will speak of ferran, though I have known many mas you present. Ferran I knew it in a party of basketball in which he plays. We were speaking for msn, and one day let’s stay to speak, and we ate in a restaurant of piera. Then we continue speaking many , and now i explain much to him. He goes to my class, i also he is one of my best friends
I knew many lot of people, but this 3 are the most important people what i knew in summer
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Hello, I am Edgar Gutiérrez, and now I will explain to you a small summary of my summer.
Start this summer satisfy for my notes, AT THE BEGINNING OF THE SUMMER,I WAS VERY SATISFIED ABOUT MY MARKS,which were very good, with an average of 7,8. Since THEN,giveMY PARENTStheygave me a new mobile phone.When
startthe summer STARTED, I COULD only go out 3 or 4 days a week, but at the END I WAS ALLOWED TO go out every day. This summer I have made SOME NEW FRIENDSmyself a friends of some peopleas Alex Juez, Ariadna Gil or Ferran Claramunt. Now, I will explain a bit HOWlike it has beenmy summer HAS BEEN with these three persons, though I have known a lot of people.First, Alex Juez, has been the best “innovation” between my friends. We HAD KNOWN EACH OTHER FOR A LONG TIME
were known of it does very much, but we never GOT ONremovewell, WE WERE NOTdo not arefriends. But from THE SCHOOL TRIP TO Cantabria we speak very much and now he is a very important person for mE.Now I speak ABOUT Ariadna Gil. I always speak TO she, I even LIKED HER
she I like me, but up to this summer we were not friends. Now we speak very much WE help EACH OTHER ourselves what we CANkhan. Often we have an argument, but we love EACH OTHERourselvesvery much.Finally I will speak ABOUT ferran, though I have known many
mas you present????.FerranIknewMET FERRAN in apartyGAME of basketbal, which he plays. We were speaking THROUGH msn, and one day WE STARTED TOlet’s stay tospeak, and we ate in a restaurant of piera. Then we continueD speaking OFTENmany, and now I explain much to him. He goes to my class, he is ALSO one of my best friendsI knew many MORE people, but thESE 3 are the most important people what I MET in summer
THANKS EDGAR, TRY NOT TO TRANSLATE FROM SPANISH WHEN YOU WRITE, TRY TO RESPECT SENTENCE STRUCTURE AND WORD ORDER.
Hello Maribel, in this text I explain one of the days that I was too happy on holidays.
I’ve been to France with my family a lot of times. One year we went to visit the region of Normandy. In this holidays we did a lot of activities, visited museums, visited cities … But I remember specially one, when we visited a museum of the “Second World War”. Now I don’t remember where is this museum, but the experience of saw airplanes, tanks, etc, was too strange. After visited this museum, my brother, my sister and I were too happy, because we did “la croqueta” in the craters that were produced for the explosions of the bombs.
All in all I Think that this holidays are one of the best holidays in my life.
Bye bye!!!
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Hello Maribel, in this text I explain one of the days that I was happIEST on holidays.
I’ve been to France with my family a lot of times. One year we went to visit the region of Normandy. In this holiday we did a lot of activities, visited museums, visited cities … But I remember specially one, when we visited a museum of the “Second World War”. Now I don’t remember where
isthis museum IS, but the experience of SEEING airplanes, tanks, etc, was too strange. After visitING this museum, my brother, my sister and I were VERY happy, because we ROLLED DOWN ( did “la croqueta” ) in the craters that were produced for the explosions of the bombs.All in all I Think that this holidays are one of the best holidays in my life.
Bye bye!!!
THANKS PAU, IT’S DIFFICULT TO TRANSLATE “FER LA CROQUETA!, JO OPTARIA PER TRADUIR QUELCOM SEMBLANT A RODOLAR AVALL…
NICE TEXT
hello maribel in this text speak about my summer 2010
The last year i went to a camping of the Catalan Pyrenees. Is a camping for the high mountain in ” Rivera De Cardós”. the name of the camping is “camping del cardós” is a espectacular place.I went with my family, friends and my girlfriend Judit. this camping is very important for me because i resort every year since I was born.
This year is very important because we passed us very well because we did many things.This year we camped in tents. 1 tend with my family and other tend with the friends with my parents. in this summer i did a lot of things:ride a horse , ride a competition bike, climbing a mountain, swin in the lake and river, and other activities.
Definitely has been a very active summer that I enjoyed to the fullest.
bye bye Maribel
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hello maribel in this text I speak about my summer 2010
Thelast year I went ___camping IN the Catalan Pyrenees. IT is a camping-SITE IN the high mountain in ” Rivera De Cardós”. The name of the camping-SITE is “camping del cardós”, IT is aespectacular place.I went with my family, friends and my girlfriend Judit. This camping-PLACE is very important for me because I GO THERE ON HOLIDAYS every year since I was born.This year WAS very important because we HAD A VERY GOOD TIME because we did many things.This year we camped in tents. 1 tenT with my family and other tenT
with the friendswith my parents’ FRIENDS. in this summer I did a lot of things:ridING a horse , rideING a competition bike, climbing a mountain, swiMMING in the lake and river, and other activities.Definitely IT has been a very active summer that I enjoyed to the fullest.
bye bye Maribel
THANKS DAVID, ENJOYABLE SUMMER! KEEP ON WRITING!
Hello Maribel! How are you? I hope well.
I’m going to speak about my holidays in “Calella de Palafrugell”. I’ve been in Calella two times, the summer of 2009 and last summer. I went to this place because the parents of my boyfriend go there every summer, and they invited me because we get on very well, and my boyfriend and I go out since december of 2008. As soon as we arrived, we went to the apartment and emptied our bags because they usually stayed there two or three weeks.Then we put on a swimsuit and went to the beach. In Calella there’re a lot of bays, and we can choose which to sunbathe and relax. I don’t like active holidays, because I think that holidays are for have relaxing.
In Calella it was windy. This type of wind is called Tramuntana, a strong wind and annoying. But always sunny and very hot. There’re so many tourists, French especially because Calella is located near the “border”. The parents of my boyfriend were sunbath all the time, and my boyfriend and I went to the sea because we wanted to saw the jellyfish with a water glasses. For lucky, the jellyfish wasn’t hurt us because we take after ourselves.
Last hollidays were so funny because we did a lot of activities during the day: for example one day we trought a bay with a “kayac”.
Bye bye Maribel, I hope you like it!
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Hello Maribel! How are you? I hope YOU’RE well.
I’m going to speak about my holidays in “Calella de Palafrugell”. I’ve been in Calella TWICE, IN the summer of 2009 and last summer. I went to this place because my boyfriend’S PARENTS go there every summer, and they invited me because we get on very well, and my boyfriend and I go out since december of 2008. As soon as we arrived, we went to the apartment and emptied our bags because they usually stay__ there two or three weeks.Then we put on a swimsuit and went to the beach. In Calella there’re a lot of bays, and we can choose which to sunbathe and relax. I don’t like active holidays, because I think that holidays are for RELAXING.
In Calella it was windy. This type of wind is called Tramuntana, a strong wind and annoying. But IT’S always sunny and very hot. There’re so many tourists, ESPECIALLY French because Calella is located near the “border”. My boyfriend’S PARENTS were sunbathING all the time, and my boyfriend and I went to the sea because we wanted to sEE the jellyfish with GOGGLES. LUCKILY, the jellyfish DIDN’T hurt us because we TOOK CARE OF ourselves.
Last hoLidays were so funny because we did a lot of activities during the day: for example one day we CROSSED a bay with a “kayac”.
Bye bye Maribel, I hope you like it!
MMM, SOUNDS LIKE VERY EXCITING HOLIDAYS! NICE TEXT, ALBA.