Midnight Nightmare (narration)

Hi you all,

The best composition (not perfect) will be always published here in the blog. This one is from Francisco Javier Pérez. Congratulations!!!

The others can read it carefully. It’s a good example of narration. It’s not very difficult. The words in bolt are MISTAKES!!! Can you see them? What would you write instead?

Midnight Nightmare

Some months ago, my parents went to visit a friend. It was very late at night and I was watching a scary movie about Halloween on TV in the living room.

Suddenly, I heard strange noises in the kitchen. I listened carefully: It sounded like the monster in the film! I was very scared and I didn’t know what to do. I was thinking to telephone my parents, but I couldn’t call them because a terrible storm had started and the telephone line was broken. When I went into the kitchen, the first think I saw was the window opened. Then, a lightning brightened the room and a big black cat  appeared in front of me. Its yellow eyes were wide opened, looking at me. Then it jumped outside the window.

I stayed quiet for a while. I closed the window quickly. Next, I returned to the ling room very nervous and I waited until my parents arrived home.

I felt very happy when my parents opened the door.